Sunday, May 28, 2006

THE PROMISE SHE KEPT


It was the sun of spring
that flashed into my ever sleepy eyes.
It was morning , beaming with life,
And to add beauty to that
There she lay , still untouched by the rays
Yet, adding her own radiance to them.
There she was beside me ,
to be with me for life and further,
Leaving behind her sphere of ' knowns'
To walk with me , my arm she caught.
Into our future of certain uncertainty.
To share my fate. " Innocence ", I thought.


Her scent was in the air.
Her feel made everthing glow
Glow with an overwhelming sense of care,
love , belonging , compassion or else
- Only she could know , what lies
behind her throb of docile turbulence.
A man can only conjecture
in mere amazenent or disbelief.
For me it was the pleasure of both ;
- Enmeshed , entangled , entwined
Confusion can be pleasant sometimes.
My sub-conscious did remind.


Ecstatic with a feeling of assured affection
Which my heart never craved for
Because it was too exotic for a wretch.
To me , only a silent promise would do.
A patient ear was my need ,
Eyes brimming with empathy , I wished.
A comforting smile was enough.
A look of promotion - a bounty.
Simple, These may seem to some.
But, perhaps the most precious were they
Of all priceles gifts on offer. They come
only to the fortunate , they say.


Again humbled by reality
Exiled from my world of fancies
My vision narrowed into my little room.
The world outside , the sky through my window
seemed too small for harbouring my elation.
The clouds no more appealed to my eyes.
Sleepy eyes , still recovering from the truth
that defeated all past fancies
by its element of pleasing suddenness.
Floating clouds seemed so lifeless , defunct.
Tufts of misery drifting away.
The white in them could never satisfy
my craze for colourful confetti today.


Still, sitting on my morning bed
I felt a satisfaction clotting inside me.
A loser in battle , but a victor within.
I now possessed 'The Gem' I wished
to treasure for my life , and further.
She gave me a reason to live.
To ' Live Life', rather than spend days
Counting one out of the stint every night.
How strange it now seemed.
That one life could change another.
Give it purpose and direction.
Passion is miracle. They strike together.


I was too lost in the blue of her eyes.
Eyes- that disarmed me helpless.
Inspired me to be patient in counting
The numerous waves that came and went
Of emotions , both subtle and obvious
Sweeping the shores of those two "blue seas".
My eyes now narrowed down
Away from her asking gaze
To her. There she lay , all smiles and joy.
Snuggling against my bruised chest
which still housed a battered heart
Tired but beating , throbbing in silence.
Deprieved of zeal , bereft of warmth
There I lay - Disillusioned. Still tranced.
For her promise was so true
And blessed by that ethereal omen
That promised to follow me through.

14 comments:

J said...

thanks for dropping by my blog. the obsecurity in content and intent were all intended.
i'm not quite able to read through long verses being in the state of mind i am in right now. but i will sometime else for sure.

laterz.

J

Monami Roy said...

broken love?
life is totally a bitch. btw, i wasnt tryin to play pool with knittin wool. i was tryin to create SARCASM!!!!
life...n its asurprises..:D
thanks for droppin!

Anonymous said...

In love aa?

Well written. Simple, hard-hitting.

***Sigh*** Oh well...

:)

nothing said...

bhaalo laaglo on the whole, tobe ektu beshi voluble, and punctuation-ta arekbaar dekho- boddo beshi inverted commas. sorry to sounds mastermoshai like. abaaro pore arekta better comment kobo.

What's In A Name ? said...

##j.....some other time..is it???

##m.s.p.....no broken love , my dear...just "the promise"..that was well kept.

##a.c.....not in love...still!!!??

##dancer....have taken note of ur suggestions and done some modifications....do let me know if it is of any improvement..

Anonymous said...

"I was too lost in the blue of her eyes.
Eyes- that disarmed me helpless.
Inspired me to be patient in counting
The numerous waves that came and went
Of emotions , both subtle and obvious
Sweeping the shores of those two "blue seas"." That was a sure killer!!!! Also, I related to the emotions portrayed in the poem. Read some of the lines very fast. BTW do I need to praise you?

Anonymous said...

"There she lay , all smiles and joy.
Snuggling against my bruised chest
which still housed a battered heart
Tired but beating , throbbing in silence.
Deprieved of zeal , bereft of warmth
There I lay - Disillusioned. Still tranced.
For her promise was so true
And blessed by that ethereal omen
That promised to follow me through."

I adored these lines. And the last two lines are a killer!!

Anonymous said...

may be you would want to delete this comment out of embarrassment but I wont mind that as long as you read it with the love I will write it.

mere bhai...

I just can't get over this poem...
you wrote it when you were 14???

Shuvo, you have the kind of talent I have always wanted to have right since I was 6 but could never have... ; you are the kind of person I wanted to be right since I was 13.

Also, you have people like Misha as your friends and so you further have my love and admiration.

I am in awe of you- that infact is an understatement;
I cherish your frienship- but that is to put it too lightly.

May you be happy and prosperous in lfe and keep blessing people with your friendship.
Your Taurean friend,
Kush.

What's In A Name ? said...

You are just too too generous in your words of praise. I am afraid but, too much of kindness scares me sometimes. Keep visiting, my friend..and keep your suggestions coming. your criticism will be as welcome as your commendations.

Anonymous said...

This poem came close to being Timeless. Timeless as in written by a great writer. I want ya to work hard like this in all your poems! Even harder of course! I wil wait for the day when each line each word by you will be timeless, like Frost's Stopping by woods on a snowy evening. This is the final word! BTW do read T.S. Eliot's The Love Song of j. Alfred Prufrock sometime! Here's the link: http://www.bartleby.com/198/1.html you wont get it so read its explanation on the net.
regards,
Kush. :)

Sandhya Ramachandran said...

a very beautiful poem with some gems for its lines!!!

//Glow with an overwhelming sense of care,
love , belonging , compassion or else
- Only she could know , what lies
behind her throb of docile turbulence.
A man can only conjecture
in mere amazenent or disbelief.
//
Brilliant!!!

//"Simple, These may seem to some.
But, perhaps the most precious were they
Of all priceles gifts on offer. They come
only to the fortunate , they say.
//

So true!!!

Oh... I could go on! Really nice way you have with words!
Keep it up!And thanks for your comments! keep visiting! [:)]

oblivious said...

y such a bruised end when it was a heart clotting with satisfaction..nice words again.

What's In A Name ? said...

# kush- Effusive as always. Thanks.

# Sandhya- Glad that you loved the unripe thoughts of an unripe mind.

# oblivious- bruised end???? Dinn get that angle before. Thought it was more of a positive end. hai naa ??

WritingsForLife said...

oh this is so beautiful :)
Very articulate.