All the while I read it, I kept on thinking, this poem would have been so great if I had had to write a critical appreciation on it in my elective English classes. The rhyming scheme would easily have been worth one paragraph. "He, toothless, grins at.." loses out on the pace of the poem, Making the structure slightly more uneven. Otherwise, the last paragraph stands out beautifully.
#A.L- Very Good! It seems you are as fastidious with rhyming meter as myself. So, your point has hit home since I knew exactly where the rhyme was breached. Thanks for pointing it out though. A change will follow.
Nah, still too many parameters (i talk like as if i was the love child of bill gates and the author of my class 10 English guidebook, it would have been very interesting to be one though, considering the author was called Jaspal Singh).
Leave it as the original one. It was good enough as it started out.
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All the while I read it, I kept on thinking, this poem would have been so great if I had had to write a critical appreciation on it in my elective English classes. The rhyming scheme would easily have been worth one paragraph.
"He, toothless, grins at.." loses out on the pace of the poem, Making the structure slightly more uneven. Otherwise, the last paragraph stands out beautifully.
#A.L- Very Good! It seems you are as fastidious with rhyming meter as myself. So, your point has hit home since I knew exactly where the rhyme was breached. Thanks for pointing it out though. A change will follow.
Did you remove the comma from "he toothless"? The comma should be there. Otherwise, its ungrammatical.
#AL- I see. How about, " His toothless grins ..." ?? eh ?
Nah, still too many parameters (i talk like as if i was the love child of bill gates and the author of my class 10 English guidebook, it would have been very interesting to be one though, considering the author was called Jaspal Singh).
Leave it as the original one. It was good enough as it started out.
btw, tufties is me, ad libber.
ahaaa..... Whos's Tufties now ???
hmm. Guessed that. And BTB...what's that ??
ok. back to the previous Rhyme-rattling form then.
what is btb?
I love the last paragraph
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